I did two hours of fiddling with the opening scene today. First I read it over and smoothed out anything that seemed awkward. Then I removed every adjective and adverb from the first five pages and considered each one individually. I probably eliminated a third of them, replaced another third with a stronger word, and kept the remaining third the same.
I have a few more exercises I'd like to do with the opening pages, but I figure I should see if I'm at least on the right track with it first. I posted the first 1,300 words to AW. I'll give it until Thursday morning to accumulate feedback.
In the meantime, I'm going to:
a) do the adjective/adverb exercise with the second half of the opening scene.
b) patch a gap in the MS where I tore out a few paragraphs and transplanted them to the opening.
c) read over the query and maybe tweak a few lines.
d) read the synopsis and evaluate how much work it still needs.
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